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a subtle sort of brilliance ([personal profile] theladyscribe) wrote in [community profile] avandell2008-04-24 02:56 pm

the albatross hangs

Title: the albatross hangs
Characters: Dean, Jess, mention of Sam (Dean/Jess)
Rating: R (for some language and sex)
Word Count: 258
Summary: There’s something fundamentally wrong about all of this.
Notes: Written for the [profile] un_love_you prompt 03: This cancels out the hurt. Table is here. Title is from “Echoes” by Pink Floyd.

the albatross hangs

The first night after he pulls her from the burning apartment, they fuck. There’s nothing but pain in the way he looks at her, but Jess doesn’t care. Sam is gone, dead, burned alive before her eyes, and somehow she escaped in the arms of his brother, and it’s not right, it’s not fair, that Sam spent his last days with him and not her.

They get drunk first, and who can blame them. The only thing that linked them together is gone, just gone, and all they have is themselves and each other.

There’s something fundamentally wrong about all of this, Jess is sure, but she’s too drunk and scared and hurt to care. She saw Sam burn, and she thought she would die there, too, burn alive below him. Nothing would be more right than that. Nothing would be more wrong. He was young, too young to die, but there he was, nailed to the ceiling after she got out of the shower. And she would have died there with him, if it weren’t for his brother.

If it weren’t for his brother, she’d be dead with Sam above her instead of here, alive (if it can be called living) with Dean inside her, and that’s one kind of fucked up that she doesn’t even want to contemplate.

So she shuts her eyes tight and pulls Dean deeper into herself, lets him drive into her, and it’s like they’re the only two people in this world that’s coming apart at the seams.

And maybe they are.

[identity profile] meg-dallen.livejournal.com 2008-04-24 07:12 pm (UTC)(link)
I love Dean and Jess together.

[identity profile] blankversesfic.livejournal.com 2008-04-24 07:26 pm (UTC)(link)
Man, this is already awesome, I can't wait to read all the rest of what you're going to write (I'm fangirling you into the future here, I think *grins*) It's desperately painful, but exactly how I would see them reacting, and I love it.

[identity profile] rafikiven.livejournal.com 2008-04-27 03:27 pm (UTC)(link)
but what about your icon!? It's Sark!!! Haven't seen him in a long time.

Oh, yeah, the topic...That pairing was desperately painful, but it was a great story! I really liked the concept and loved the pairing. I just love a good Dean/Jess story.

[identity profile] jojothecr.livejournal.com 2008-04-24 09:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, this is really horrible. The tragedy, I mean. Not your story. Because your story is awesome. I really like it.
Thanks for sharing.

[identity profile] neetha.livejournal.com 2008-04-24 10:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Even though this is Jess-pain, I can still feel the manpain seeping between the words.

It makes me happy.

Which makes me a sick person.

:)
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[personal profile] lark_ascends 2008-04-25 01:28 am (UTC)(link)
You can really feel their pain.

Well done.
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[personal profile] sylvanwitch 2008-04-25 03:50 am (UTC)(link)
Ouch--awesomely angsty in all the best, hurtful ways. Dark, desperate, painful, wrong. Great work! I look forward to more from you! :-)
Edited 2008-04-25 03:50 (UTC)

[identity profile] joans23.livejournal.com 2008-04-25 06:29 am (UTC)(link)
This was broken and hurty and a little sexy even. Everything I like!
I want to go read the first one again now - this explains some of what was happening in there for me.
Have you settled on a title for the table yet?

[identity profile] elanurel.livejournal.com 2008-04-25 06:32 am (UTC)(link)
I am really enjoying this series. The grief is palpable and realistic - and the reaction to what happened is likewise real, anger and desperation and guilt. There's nothing hopeful about their reaction; it's more of a way of punishing themselves than offering true comfort...

I could wax about this for several paragraphs but it's late and I'm, well, spacey. But I didn't want to let this second story in the series pass without saying something.

It was lovely and quite the gut punch.

[identity profile] elanurel.livejournal.com 2008-04-25 10:22 pm (UTC)(link)
I think this is especially true because of the the way that you've diverted from canon - just one change can make a world of difference. The guilt alone is a weight that may never get lifted, so I can also see where you're coming from with it being more hopeless than hopeful. There's a lot they're both working through and there may not be a way to fix it.

It's certainly a compelling dynamic - like I said, this story was like a punch in the stomach - and I want to see the rest, obviously.

If it were me writing this, I'd feel compelled to find some way to bring in a little bit of hope...so I applaud you for being so unflinching in your portrayal of the relationship.

[identity profile] elanurel.livejournal.com 2008-04-26 08:02 pm (UTC)(link)
It is amazing what we can write for the good of the story. ;-P

(I'll have to tell you about my own struggle with this, but not on your comments list for your wonderful fic. ;-P)

[identity profile] workswithwords.livejournal.com 2008-04-25 01:16 pm (UTC)(link)
SO good. I love the way that its not very long but is still so packed with emotion it takes you off guard.

Wonderfully written.

[identity profile] brin-bailey.livejournal.com 2008-04-26 04:31 am (UTC)(link)
Um, yay for total fuckedupness. Awesome. I love the achy feeling this has. *sigh*

[identity profile] aislinamara.livejournal.com 2008-04-28 04:13 am (UTC)(link)
Wow... just.... wow....

albatross

[identity profile] quirkies.livejournal.com 2008-06-08 05:13 pm (UTC)(link)
hey! i figured out the super secret follow the link instructions to the rest of the 'verse.
this one feels more emotionally detached and just shell-shocked than the other 2 i just read. this is definitely how i'd see the 2 of them reacting.